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Im going to do another banner but with the characters name so you'll have in mind of what the ninjas and mafias look like.
Well i only started writting this just recently i just want some feedback and suggestions of how i can improve this story. I didnt get to spend much time writting it so it might have some mispelt words or maybe might not make sense.
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Chapter 1 - The Introduction
The mafia leader of Kerning City Toni one of the most respected mafia had too many issues regarding paying back another mafia leader called Serenzo who was one of the richest mafia in Victoria. Toni had many good friends who always helped him when he was doing dangerous business with other mafia’s of Victoria. If Toni didn’t pay Serenzo back with the money he lost then there would be a war amongst them. Serenzo who had many friends who didn’t like Toni and also Serenzo was supported by a band of ninjas , assassins and bandits who loved to assassinate people for Serenzo. Toni wasn’t scared of them as Serenzo always had a band of ninjas , assassins and also bandits.
The dangerous of all mafias was a ninja named Judoka from Japan he was a very wise and rich mafia ninja who had many bands of ninjas who all were near him whenever he did business. Ninjas to the South of Kerning City were one of the most dangerous as they were all armed with swords and knives. Judoka owned those band of ninjas but they disliked how he treated them. Lastly a mafia named Balthazar was a mafia of Kerning City and they had an underground tunnel where his mafias hanged around though he only owned a group of ninjas which consisted of 6 ninjas who were very skilled at assassinating. Most mafias didn’t know they were good as they always attacked when the other people weren’t expecting.
The only thing Toni wanted was money but he couldn’t get enough money to pay Serenzo back because he had many debts amongst Balthazar. Helsing a band of ninjas was the most biggest band of ninjas which consisted of over 70 ninjas. Helsing didn’t belong to anyone and wasn’t allowed to be bought or hired by anyone they were only there to protect Kerning City from invaders.
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